Mountain, Water Water, Mountainmirrorworld sleek skeen even the cannabis store straddles the street under the raven gulls’ renegade shadow tell me the name for a puddle unpuddling My gosh! Outside is a comicbook sound — speech bubbles of squelch squish squeamish and bike tire spit. life imitates light light imitates life At last, reaching the sky, a finger into night, void black, retracted at the putrid ooze and then a pinkening: some celestial chemical reaction as if this rain incessant and blanket was vinegar cloud-clad Olympics and their baking soda peaks Icarus and Prometheus sat around a Bunsen burner in togas turned lab coats and other modern pleasantries
Thanks, Mason, for sharing this insight into your poem, its creation and excellent reading. I love: 'light imitates life/life imitates light'. Re does a poem ever really end that reminds me of the Paul Valery quote; 'A poem is never finished, only abandoned'. Yours feels far more finished than abandoned though! PS: a small point it's bunsen.
Ha! Thank you Terry. Yes, such a great line by Valery. Sounds like I may have abandoned spell check (and maybe Chemistry class for that matter 😅). Will update!
I mean this one’s a real ringer. “Tell me the name for / A puddle / unpuddling.” And then “Pinkening”
I read the title as the mirror of the mountain within a body of water’s reflection. Then to see the map of Washington was a real treat. Nature’s mimicry.
The comicbook sound stanza is pure pleasure and muck.
I love hearing about the journey you take to the poem we see!
Thank you, Emily! Noted :) More process to come!
Thanks, Mason, for sharing this insight into your poem, its creation and excellent reading. I love: 'light imitates life/life imitates light'. Re does a poem ever really end that reminds me of the Paul Valery quote; 'A poem is never finished, only abandoned'. Yours feels far more finished than abandoned though! PS: a small point it's bunsen.
Ha! Thank you Terry. Yes, such a great line by Valery. Sounds like I may have abandoned spell check (and maybe Chemistry class for that matter 😅). Will update!
Really appreciate the kind words.
I mean this one’s a real ringer. “Tell me the name for / A puddle / unpuddling.” And then “Pinkening”
I read the title as the mirror of the mountain within a body of water’s reflection. Then to see the map of Washington was a real treat. Nature’s mimicry.
The comicbook sound stanza is pure pleasure and muck.
“This one’s for Slop” made me laugh out loud.
Thanks, Mark! That read of the title is wonderful.
Glad you enjoyed and laughed 😊